Here is the news….
16 11 2006We’ve done some videoconferencing this afternoon with Clunbury school.
Enter the videoconferencing room here
Clunbury pupils, what did you think about the Hope School reports?
Note the person’s name you’re commenting on. What did you think of the use of the:
1) Headline;
2) Introduction which told a story;
3) Events in time order (and past tense);
4) Quotes and reported speech;
5) Passive voice.
Great work Clunbury and Hope! Thanks for all your useful comments - Hope you had as much fun as we did!
Year 5 and 6 went to Amsterdam! Click the flag to visit their blog.
To Sarah
Your report was very good, you had a punchy headline and you used the passive voice very well. Your quotes were interesting and well read.
from Steph. P.S. You covered all five areas
Dear Heather
I thought your report was very good you mentioned all five areas and had a catchy healine
from Jessica
To Andrew ,
We thought your report was great ,you hqave sed all 5 points we thourght your:
Headline was short and punchy,
Intro was well written,
Events was in time order,
Passive voice was well used and you used quotes.
from, connie and katie
To Jess
I loved your report it had a realy punchy headline and also a good introduction with a told story.
I think you can improve on your qouts and your report coments also I think you can improve on your passive voice .
I think your events in time order where realy good.
Bye Bye
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
To Sarah,
We thought your report was good because it had a catchy headline. Also it told a good start of the situation. You put in good passive voices. It was good that you used passed tence. You used reportive speech. We have wrote this message to say well done.
Hi Jess
Your report was interesting, good and I thought you read it well. You did all of the five things in the report. You had a very good punchy headline and you had good expretion too.
from Jolee and louise
p.s. please email us back!
to jess
Nicely read the other day it was a good report except it turned into a bit of a story , you read it loud and clear but we lost the signal. It was a good report you got all the features right and it sounded good. We liked some of your quotes and the title was punchy
THATS ALL FROM US!
by by
Emaya&Abi
To Fay,
I really enjoyed your report. You had a smashing head line and you included introduction which told a story. But you need to include a passive voice.
Bye Bye From Melissa Angell
Dear Edward
Your report was brilliant you have used all 5 points . We really liked your intro and headline and you used the passive vioce well.
from connie and katie
To Elkie,
Well done with your report you had a great headline and intro but sometimes it would switch to a story, but overall it was great.
WELL DONE,
from Connie
Dear Elkie,
We thought your report was good because it had a good introducion, and you included past tence, reportive speech and passive voice. We have sent this message to say well done!
To Andrew,
you read your report very well you got most of your news report features right, we think you reported your report very well.
From Ben and Jordan.
To Sarah,
You had everything in your report. A very punchy headline.Introduction which told a story. Event in time order. reported speech. Passive voice
See You From Melissa Angell
Hi Elkie!
I thought your report was great, you read it so well. I dont know how you managed it. You had a really good punchy headline and you had all the five things you needed in your report.
From Louise and Jolee
P.S. I really miss you at swimming and please email us back! from Louise
To sarah
I loved your report it had a realy punchy headline and also a good introduction with a told story.
I think you can improve on your qouts and your report coments also I think you can improve on your passive voice .
I think your events in time order where realy good.
Good Bye
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
To Edword
I loved your report it had a realy punchy headline and also a good introduction with a told story.
I think you can improve on your qouts and your report coments also I think you can improve on your passive voice .
Good Bye
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
Hi Cloe
Nice report yestoday sounded good what did you think of my reports hope you liked it by for now. FROM Emaya
back to Abi
hi I liked the report you got 4/5 from us at clunbury . the report was good but it was a bit quiet because the signal was bad , it was delayed and all that kind of thing . However you did a good job!
from Abi
To Tracyanne
You had a very catchy headline, a very good introduction whitch told the start of the situation. But i think you should work on putting your events in time order, quotes and reportive speech. you also need to work on your passive voice. Try and work on these three things.
We did really enjoy it
To Jess,
you had a great headline and a great introduction on your news report you described the inccident very well. Nice quotes and reported speech
from Jordan and Ben.
To Jess
I realy liked your report because you used a realy punchy headline and a introduction with a told story.You need a passive voice in your report.
Good bye Melissa Angell
To Tracy Ann,
you had a good report, you had 4 points the point you missed out was the headline but try to remeber next time, overall the report was great.
WELL DONE .
from Connie.
To Edward
I really liked your report because you used a really punchy headline and a introduction with a told story.You need a passive voice in your report.
Good bye Melissa Angell
P.S. You need more speech in your report
To Elkie
I really liked your report because you used a really punchy headline and a introduction with a told story.You had a very good passive voice in your report.
Good bye Melissa Angell
P.S. You need more speech in your report you had some but you can put some more speech in your report.
To Cloe
We realy enjoyed your report it was really good it had a punchey headline and a introduction with told story.
I think you can improve on your quotes and report coments,aport from that it was really good.
good bye for now
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
To Jess,
you had a brilliant report and you identified all 5 points your headline was great and so was all the rest.
WELL DONE.
From Katie & Connie.
To Joe
I really liked your report because you used a really smashing headline and a introduction with a told story.You need a passive voice in your report.
See You Melissa Angell
P.S. You need more speech in your report
To Joe
We realy enjoyed your report it was really good it had a punchey headline and a introduction with told story.
I think you can improve on your quotes and report coments,aport from that it was really good.
good bye for now
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
To Lauren
I thought you report on the was great and you read it well too. You had a super headline. Did you enjoy being on the webcam? You had all five things you needed in your report.
From Jolee and Louise
P.S. See you soon, I think. (you will know recognise me when you see me) from Jolee.
To Fay
We realy enjoyed your report it was really good it had a punchey headline and a introduction with told story.
I think you can improve on your quotes and report coments,aport from that it was really good.
good bye for now
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
To Joe,
you got all he 5 points i really like the headline because it is short and punchy i also liked the way you did your quotes.
WELL DONE
from Connie
To Ellci
We realy enjoyed your report it was really good it had a punchey headline and a introduction with told story.
I think you can improve on your quotes and report coments,aport from that it was really good.
good bye for now
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
To Heather
I really liked your report but wheres your headline and a introduction with a told story.You need a passive voice in your report.
Good bye Melissa Angell
P.S. You need more speech in your report
Dear Joe,
You did well on your report. your headline was good, it had a good introduction, you did well on your past tence, quotes and good passive voice. We sent you this message to say well done!
To Healther
We realy enjoyed your report it was really good it had a punchey headline and a introduction with told story.
I think you can improve on your quotes and report coments,aport from that it was really good.P.S.welldone
from stephanie moulder and sarah morgan
To Thomas,
you have got all the features and we really liked the headline and your qotes plus your reportive spech was good.
Well Done !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
From Connie and Louise
To lauren
what did you think of my report
Steph
what did you think of hannah’s report
Dear Mr Rowe and Class 2 at Hope.
We all at Clunbury enjoyed listening to your reports. As well giving us an opportunity to assess your reports we all had great fun! You had some super reports.
Best Wishes
Mr Davis and Class 2
Dear Mr Rowe and class 2 at Hope,
I really enjoyed listening to your reports they were all very good. Hope to do it again see you soon!.
From
Louise