Ten Green Bottles - your ideas please
6 02 2007Ten green bottles, hanging on the wall. Ten green bottles, hanging on the wall. And if one green bottle, should accidently fall, (Crash!) There’ll be nine green bottles hanging on the wall. Not very imaginative is it? How about including some similes or metaphors to describe The wall
The bottles The crash
e.g. Ten beautiful bottles, green like the sea, hanging on the wall. (That’s much better isn’t it?)
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Ten shiny, sparkling bottles dull green like ivy, trembling on the old crumbling wall, the walls surface rough as a cows tongue.
Ten seaweed bottles dangling like a spider on its silvery web.
and if one leafy green beautiful bottle should be accidentaly pushed doing somersaults in the air chinks of glass flying through the air like a airoplane until it hits the stony pavement and the impact of the crash sent the seaweed glass soaring through the airand going into the road where cars whizzed by.
there’ll be nine emerald bottles sitting petrified on the crumbling wall
by polly
This is my version of ten green bottles: Ten butiful green as grass bottles hanging on the wall.Ten emrald bottles hanging on the wall. And f one emrald dimond bottle from the rough wall should axidently fall onto the rough ground below. There will be nine emrald bottles hanging on the wall.
Ten Colourful bottles hanging on the shiny wall brown as shreaded wheat,
Ten Rainbow bottles bright like rainbow drops on a shiny wall like diamonds sparkling.
And if one colourful diamond glass will accidently shatter across the glimmering pavement,
There’ll be nine glimmering bottles dangling on the diamond calved wall.
Ten gren bottles.
Ten green bottles green like the sea, dangling on the wall,
Ten cucumber green bottles ,sparkling in the rain, on the wall,
And if one green bottle should accidntly crash,
loads of glass will be on the floor,
There will be nine green bottles dangling on the wall.
Ten broccoli coloured green bottles dangling, helplessly,on the wall, ten leaf green bottles sparkling in the sun, and if one emerald bottle, should acciddenly smash on the smooth, hard pavment, there’ll be nine green bottles hanging like diamonds in the sun.
Ten grassy green bottles, swaying like a monkey on the wall
Ten lime bottles, like lemon juice being squezzed into a jar,
and if one lime bottle should accidently crash oon the rough and bumpy ground
They’ll be nine lime bottles swaying on a wall.
Ten green bottles like the green forest grass, hanging on the wall,
Ten geen bottles like rustling leaves, hanging on the wall like monkeys,
and if one green bottle should accendently hit the very smooth pavment on the bottem of the wall,
there will be nine green bottles hanging on the wall
Ten sparking bottle dangling like a mokey on a trees
Ten emerald sparking bottle with diamoonds
in them on the wall
and one sparking bottle acadently smash on the deep mountains
There will be nine sparking bottle dangling on the wall
Ten grass green bottles, drooping on the wall,
Ten shimmering green bottles, dandling on the wall
and if one green bottle hould accidently crash on the ground there’ll be nine clean green bottles drooping on the wall.
Ten little green grassy bottles hanging down like a monky on the wall.
Ten emerald green bottles danging on the wall like aging bat han down.
And if one green grassy bottle went bang the concreek there will only be 9 green grassy bottles hanging on the wall.
Ten clover green bottles dangling like a monkey on the frozen wall. Ten moss green bottles dangling on the smooth wall. And if one shiny green bottle should accidentally drop on the wet dirty ground there’ll be nine scared green bottles dangling on the wall.
Ten grass green bottles, dangling, swinging on the crumbling, algi covered wall,
Ten blocks of seaweed clinging on-to the broken, old wall,
If one poor, ancient bottle should fall with a perilous shatter, where the cars swerve to avoid the daggers falling from the ocean blue sky,
there will be nine green bottles leaning on the edge.
Ten emerald diamonds clanking with a gale blowing about on the wall.
Ten emerald bottles hooking on a rugged cliff.
and if one emerald bould be blown off the cliff and smash on to a smooth rock below and smash like an atomic bomb on a city.
There would be nine lettuce bottles dangling on to a wall.
Ten lovly green bottels, as green as lettis hanging on the dusty old wall, Ten amaroled bottels dangling on the wall like monky on a tree
and if one bottel should hapen to fall to the bizzy main road benth it there will be nine green bottels hanging on the dusty old wall.
Ten emereld bottles pearing down to the traffik billow
Ten dimmend bottles pearing down off the walk to the traffik billow
If one emereld bottle should axadently fall down on the russty car bonets
the’ll be nine green bottles pearing offthe walk.
Ten butiful green as grass bottles hanging on the wall.
Ten emrald bottles hanging on the wall.
And if one emrald dimond bottle should axidently fall.
There will be nine green bottles hanging on the wall.
Ten green bottles like lettuce, wobling on the brown dirty wall
Ten beautiful emerald bottles , slipping on the wall like an iceskater
and if one lettuce bottle slips of the brick wall and lands on a spikey cat like a plane crashing into a city. There would be nine cucumber bottles wobling on a wall.
Ten dazling dark green bottles cripping to the crumbling, like bettles dangling above a laver pit. Ten emerald elastic bottles in an dectagon shape hanging of there bit of string that by the second is becoming thinner and thinner from the crippled wall. But if one dimond bottle should accidently explode in to a shower of emerald glass and spert out a million pieces of dimond out there be nine green bottles hanging for there life on the lifless wall of doom that has glass all around the digging in to the wall.
Ten brocolli green bottel,hangging on for there life on the wall.
Ten diamond shiney bottel,hangging on the wall.
and if there is one shiney bottel should accidently fall on the bumpy pavement.
there’ll be nine green bottels hangging on the wall.
Ten green bottles,like apples swaying in the wind
Ten leavy bottles russling on the wall
if one green bottle should crackel then smash
They’ll be nine sparkling bottles hanging on the wall
ten grassy green bottles dangling on the wall ten greeny goe bottles nearly off the wall and if one grassy green bottle should accidently fall and smash on the thick spiky concrete there’ll be nine greeny bottles sitting on the wall.
Ten green bottles
Ten green glass bottles hanging on the hard wall.
Ten frozen green bottles hanging on the wall.
And if one green bottle accidenly feel on the ruff ground below.
There would be nine green bottles hanging on the wall.
Ten cabbage green bottles, dropping from the wall not knowing who will explode.
Ten dazzling bottles, dangling like a family of sloths from the wall as if it were there tree.
But if one dimond bottle should accidenterly fall like a bomb and explode in a shower of glass, there will be nine dazzling dimonds, dangling from the wall.
Ten emerald green bottles dangling lifelessly on the wall,
Ten cucumber green bottles hanging like a monkey on the wall.
And if precious diamond was to accidently fall,
There’ll be nine green bottles hanging on the wall
By Thomas
Ten grassy green bottles dangling like a chimpanzees on the wall. Ten crystal bottles like dimonds sparkling on the wall.but if one bottle falls of the wall of the wall [crash] then there’s nine green bottles hanging on the wall
by Warren
Ten grass green bottles hanging like meat, dangling from a wall.
And if one fell off, bang, crash, boom.
There will be nine sparkling bottles sitting on the wall which is near the sharp edge that is near a hole.
The children have produced some excellent alternatives to the old ‘Ten Green Bottles’ song. I can see there are some budding song writers in the school.
Well done!
You have all done a great job!
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